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| A Warning Not Heeded Steven js (at) smilingwithteeth (dot) com Category: Adult
The hairbrush smacked into her bare backside for the 50th time. Melissa's backside was aching her. Each subsequent swat felt like someone had let a bunch of bees free to sting her hiney. She was over his lap now, crying like a little girl crying for the first time in a long time from a spanking. He stopped the spanking as he spoke. "Did I warn you not to do it?" came his rhetorical question. Before she could catch her breath to answer him, the brush landed another ten times. "OWWWWWW!! Yes, you warned me. Please no more. I am sorry." It was too late as the hairbrush smacked into the base of her cheeks, which up until now had managed to escape without any punishment. These spanks brought even more tears and a few screams as well. She sounded like a little girl. The last time she had cried from a spanking she was 13 years old and her mother caught her stealing money from her purse. She was guilty and she cried her eyes out during that very painful trip across her mom's knee. Her mom had lowered her panties which hadn't happened to her since she last was spanked at age eleven. As an adult spanking had always turned her into a good girl and she enjoyed being spanked. At least she enjoyed it most of the time. This time however, it was very different. When you are warned not to do something, and you do it anyway, and it comes back to bite you in the butt, you only have yourself to blame. So each stroke from the hairbrush hurt and it hurt more than just a physical hurt. It was a mental hurt for not believing what he was telling her. As he spanked her he felt a bit sorry for her, as he wasn't accustom to her crying let alone bawling her eyes out. But he did warn her and he had promised her the spanking of her life, if she did it, and if it came back to bite her. The day had begun without him saying anything to her about it. But when they got to this special place, he spoke to her loud and clear. He was in the passenger seat of her SUV as they pulled up to the pump. He sighed and said, "What does that sign say, young lady?" "Um, it says four dollars and thirty two cents per gallon, sir." "Yes, and when you bought this vehicle two years ago, what did I tell you?" "You told me not to. You said gas prices were going to soar." "And what else did I say?" "You said when gas prices soar, you were going to…." She stopped and blushed. "I what?" he persisted. "You said when gas prices sore, you'd make my ass sore, sir" "Yes and as soon as we get home, I am going to make good on that promise." |
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| CK:
CrimsnKid6 (at) aol (dot) com A spanking story with an economic message, I can't argue with that concept. I know a few people who believe that SUV drivers should be punitively spanked in general, because of the way that many of them seem to drive–inconsiderately and arrogantly–so this would be their kind of story. Since gasoline prices have been rising more or less steadily for the past half-dozen years, it wouldn't have taken a financial mastermind to make the prediction that the spanker in this story earlier made–too bad for the heroine, short-term for her posterior and long-term for her pocketbook, that she didn't listen to him. At least she's shown finally getting her punishment; she would likely have been living in trepidation for quite a while as gasoline prices continued to rise and she continually wondered when her disciplinarian would decide that they'd reached the "spanking point,* so to speak. The temporal inversion in the plotline, showing the chastisement at the beginning (mostly via description) and the reason for it at the end (mostly via dialogue), worked well in this narrative… |
| Alex:
alexbirch (at) blueyonder (dot) co (dot) uk A matter of fact sort of spanking story , nicely told, until it reached the amusing finale which was topical and funny. Without giving the plot away, the crime and punishment have a particular resonance for me. If Melissa lived in the UK , and the same punishment criteria applied, she wouldn't be sitting down for a month!!!! Pleasant tale without being anything extra special but a nice finish. |
| Kris:
worsci (at) webtv (dot) net For a person who doesn't usually cry during spankings, one has to wonder what made this one so painful that they couldn't hold back the tears. Had she really not believed that he would spank her, or was it her disbelief that gas prices would get that high? I just don't quite buy that she was so mentally torn up about owning a gas guzzler that it was too much to be spanked for the price of gas. If it was the pain of the punishment, then perhaps a more sensuous description of the torment might convince me. Was he hitting her harder than usual? Or on the same place, over and over, until that spot was so tender and swollen and sensitive that she couldn't help but squirm in his grip, gasping at each blow? Some minor technical details–the repetition of backside in the first paragraph, the use of "sore" for "soar"–could use some tweaking. |
| Hal:
janhaltn (at) gmail (dot) com Cute story and a nice flow. This story held my interest from the first to the last word. Took me a minute to figure out the age of the spankee. I enjoyed reading this story. It had nice word pictures. I hope that this story is repeated in many households across the nation. I look forward to reading more stories by this writer. Good job. |