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This is in a form I think of as "radio drama" -- all dialogue with no descriptions ("he demanded" or "she said coyly") and no stage directions except for ellipses to indicate pauses. I trust the voices and all else to the reader's imagination. Patrick Dempsey, George Clooney, Scott Martinez, Dan Watters, Orlando Bloom. That's your list? Anything wrong? Lemme see yours. OK Scarlett Johansson, Jessica Biehl, Halle Berry, Naomi Watts. And Kate Austen on Lost? She's a character, not a person. I'd still like to sleep with her. Like you'd really have a chance of meeting, let alone boinking, her or any of these others. I know. But the deal is five people that IF it happened, after we're married, we'd each be OK with. So if Halle Berry and I . . . Hey, it's not funny. Sorry. You and Halle Berry. Right. I'm so OK with that. No problem. And McDreamy is panting to do you, right? But if he was, and if I sign off on this list, then no complaint. . . . . But who's this Scott Martinez. Some guy in accounts. There's no way really. He's disgustingly faithful; he doesn't even flirt with the really pretty girls. Besides, he's getting transferred to Phoenix. But I kinda have a thing for him. And Dan Watters? A guy I used to know. Know? OK, date. You dated lots of guys. He was . . it was special. You never told me about him. Like I say, it was special. But you're telling me now. Well, we're getting married, and . . . I guess I'm using this list to tell you something. About him? About me. What? It's hard. I mean, we're pretty good together, you and me, the sex and everything. He was better? Not better, just different. Maybe better too. How? This is really hard for me to say. But . . . well . . he used to spank me. Spank you? Yeah, it was like all these games we'd play. We'd pretend I'd used his car without permission or acted slutty in front of other guys. Sometimes I'd put on this schoolgirl outfit, and he'd be the principal. It'd always end with me over his lap with my panties down and him spanking me. Hard? Yeah. My ass would get really red. Did it hurt? What do you think? I'd try to squirm away, or I'd put a hand behind me, but he'd just clamp my wrist. Or he'd make me put out my hands and he'd tie them with a silk scarf, and then I'd go back across his lap. Sometimes he used a ruler. God, that stung. You didn't tell him to stop? That's the really weird thing. It hurt, but then, I kinda liked it too. It was like I didn't want it, but I wanted it. Does that seem too weird to you? I know we've never talked about this before. But . . . No, go on. A couple of times I spanked him. Either way, the sex afterward was just . . . like nothing I've ever. . . Better than . . Yeah. I'm really sorry. I can take him off the list. That's OK. But I want to change something on mine . … OK, here. Wait, I can't quite . . . You crossed out Scarlett Johansson, and . . . What's this name? Jennifer something? Jennifer Brooks. Who's she? |
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| Zoey:
zprymantis (at) smilingwithteeth (dot) com The ending line in this made me laugh, and I noticed with personal amusement that the actors names near the beginning were not as familiar to me as the name in the punch line. I loved the conversational tone and grammar in this piece and it made the story even more enjoyable. Very imaginative and fun to read. |
| Alex:
alexbirch (at) blueyonder (dot) co (dot) uk Had I not already read this on the ng, I would still have a good guess at the identity of the writer for there are few so skilled in the art of communicating dialogue which sounds so natural and easy. This story is a splendid exercise in communicating beyond the obvious, a sub text of wants and needs indicated more directly by one partner than the other…but a delightful ending and I'm sure his clarification continues ( physically?) long after the story ends. A joy to read. |
| Jess:
peaceluvnbooks (at) clovermail (dot) net Okay, I admit it, I don't know who Jennifer Brooks is. Is she from SSS? The name is familiar… I imagine the ending would be much more amusing to me if I knew for sure. Nevertheless, I really did like this piece. I'm a fan of stories with a lot of dialogue and having this one done entirely that way made it extra fun to read. But dialogue isn't always easy to write and I liked that these characters' words and expressions were so lifelike. I think the author captured the little subtleties of conversation very well. After all, a discussion where one first tells a partner about a spanking kink can be a complicated one, and I'm glad that someone recognized that and decided to turn it into a dialogue story. I especially liked this part…"That's the really weird thing. It hurt, but then, I kinda liked it too. It was like I didn't want it, but I wanted it." That seems like a fairly accurate description of what spanking enjoyment can be like. And it can be hard to explain that to another person, and the story conveys that awkwardness very well. I was totally able to get into the head of this woman who is describing how she enjoyed spanking, and if an author can get me to relate to his/her character, then that is usually a sign of great writing. |
| Hal:
janhaltn (at) gmail (dot) com It took me a few minutes after reading this story to stop laughing enough to write this review. I had fun reading this story and I hope that is why the author wrote it. I was surprised that I knew who movie/television stars were on the lists. I took time to think about who would be on my list, so the enjoyment of this story lasted long after I had read it. Who knows, I might be working on my list for the next several days. There are so many to choice from. Day dreaming is always enjoyable at my old age. This story had a nice flow to it, go along with the interesting word pictures. I look forward to reading more stories by this author. |