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The Punishment Cell
Abel

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Category: Adult
(c) Abel Jenkins 2008


They'd left her alone. Here, in this room. Just her and the punishment frame, and the small pile of prison clothes that she'd removed, as instructed, and placed in a neat pile on the floor.

Watson had brought her here. The officer in charge of C wing. The officer with whom she'd argued earlier in the day. (Why had she argued? Why had she been so stupid? Why couldn't she turn back time?). Led her, handcuffed, down the long, silent, antiseptic corridors, unlocking each of the heavy doors in turn, locking them firmly behind her. Brought the girl who'd questioned his authority to the place where it would be demonstrated to her in such unequivocal terms.

Then left, without so much as a glance.

Ten minutes ago? Thirty? Hard to keep track of time.

Too long. Not long enough.

Her eyes kept glancing to the polished wooden contraption in the centre of the high, bare cell. Glancing, looking away, steeling herself, glancing back. The leather ties that would bind her ankles. Looking away. Looking away. The smooth, dark wood over which they'd have her bend, the ties for her wrists on the opposite side. Looking away. Looking away.

She shivered and wrapped her arms around herself. It was cold. So cold, sitting here, naked, on this solitary plastic chair. A single bulb hung above her, the only frail source of light or warmth in this lonely place.

She'd been caned on admission, as the magistrate had instructed to her shock and to cries of disbelief from her family and friends crowded into the tiny courtroom. Twenty strokes as she touched her toes in the prison's reception room, between stripping from her own clothes and covering herself with the rough, ugly, government-issue uniform. Each stroke unbearable, for its pain and its shame, each marking her transition, her loss of freedom.

But today was different. No cane here. No mere admissions officer. Any moment now: the prison Punishment Officer, bearing a birch. The birch, of which the girls whispered so reverentially. (Apart, that is, from those who'd received it: they fell silent, looked away, tried not to remember. Tonight, she'd become one of them).

They would flog her until they were confident that she would co-operate fully for the remainder of her sentence, they'd said. Until she understood that girls did not challenge officers. Until she was suitably punished.

Waiting, glancing, waiting.

Crying, softly. Wiping away the tears with the back of her hand.

Waiting, waiting.

And then, in the distance, the sound of a metal door opening and closing, and the clatter of boots on stone growing ever-closer…


Readers Comments:
Alex:  alexbirch (at) blueyonder (dot) co (dot) uk

Who knows where this authoritarian state is meant to be..and does it matter? The story of a girl facing corporal punishment, told with a tremendous sense of atmosphere which tingles the nerve endings as you wait with her for the eventual nemesis. It's hard to create that kind of feeling in a 500 word story but the author has managed it remarkably well.

Kris:  worsci (at) webtv (dot) net

Nice anticipation building story, well written.  Good job.
CK:  CrimsnKid6 (at) aol (dot) com

This is a fine mood piece, capturing the details of the protagonist's anguished and apprehensive mindset as she awaits what will undoubtedly be a very severe punishment. Sometimes the dread anticipation is as punitive, or perhaps almost as punitive anyway, as the actual discipline itself, so the prisoner is effectively undergoing the initial part of her chastisement as she regretfully relives her recent mistakes in her mind.

The actual birching isn't shown and there's no elaboration on the specifics of the narrator's offenses, neither the crime(s) she was imprisoned for nor exactly what she earlier argued with the guard about. This lack of specificity creates a rather Kafkaesque feel to the narrative, except that the dreamlike quality will almost certainly disappear once the victim's physical punishment actually begins.

Domino:  domino at Domin-o (dot) org (dot) uk

This author is a Master in the art of suspense and anticipation! He makes it easy for his reader to fully empathise with the waiting girl. Her crime doesn't matter - it of no consequence to know what has reduced her to this state - the only overwhelming fact is that, sore as she already is, there is nothing in her world other than the fact of her imminent harsh punishment.

I'm sure the author will be gratified to know he made this reader shiver alongside his heroine.