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| The King and His Men Kate James krjames (at) mac (dot) com Category: Child 'Someday I'm going to marry one of them,' thought the seven year old, perched on her window seat, peaking through the white curtains with the little pink flowers. She was of course, referring to the King and his accompanying noblemen who moved loudly down her street every Tuesday and Friday evenings. Rosemary would never miss a night watching these men in their dark robes, colorful vests, and thick gloves move between the houses. She was so caught up in her thoughts that she didn't hear her father come into the room. She turned her head, startled, when she heard her name. "Rosemary?" She was still kneeling, hands resting on the sill, but now had her head turned towards her father. 'Oh no!' she thought to herself. 'He's making me miss the show!' "What are you doing there?" her father, Henry, said sternly as he walked into the room, turning on the Little Mermaid desk lamp next to the single bed in the middle of the room. "Um…" Rosemary couldn't think of a good reason to be out of bed at nearly 10 at night, so she simply looked at the floor. Her father walked to her side and picked her up, peering out the window. "Sweetie, were you watching the garbage men?" He was a bit perplexed. Rosemary knew her bedtime was 8, and though she didn't have to be asleep, she was not allowed to get out of her bed. "Er, yes Daddy." Rosemary looked at her father, her small green eyes piercing the shadowed blackness between them. She knew she was going to get a spanking. She had been spanked for something similar before - only that time she had been caught drawing with a flashlight and crayons. Henry sat on the mussed-up bed, setting his little girl in front of him. He never liked having to spank Rosemary, but felt it was a necessary evil to parenting. His father had spanked him when he was growing up, and believed in it strongly. The only difference between his childhood spankings and Rosemary's, were that he was spanked with a leather strap. He couldn't bring himself to use the small paddle his father had given him, and had remained steadfast in using his hand. "Don't spank me! I won't do it again, I promise," Rosemary looked right at her father, eyes large, her mouth open slightly. "I have to Rosemary." Henry didn't like to talk much. She knew the rules and the consequences. He pulled her close and reached under her nightshirt and pulled her snug Beauty and The Beast underwear down to her knees. Quickly lifting her over his lap, the spanking commenced before Rosemary could really process it. Her reaction was delayed, but she quickly grew animated. Her howls and "Ows!" and "Ouches!!" fell on the seemingly deaf ears of her father, as well as the garbage men listening through the cracked window in her bedroom. |
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| Mary:
gemcollector2001 (at) yahoo (dot) com What a wonderful imagination Rosemary has! I loved this story and could very easily see this little scene between the two of them playing out in my minds eye, picturing the king and his men on their parade through the village. This story made me smile on many levels on a personal note when I "play" it is one of my own "rules" that once put down to bed I am not allowed out of it until a grownup comes to get me, so I can completely relate to little Rosemary's dilemma. At first I wondered how the author was going to tie in current day with her minds eye reality, and the use of the garbage men was one I was not expecting at all. a very nice touch. :) I also liked how the window was left partially open thus allowing them to spy upon her as she had previously spied upon them. I do feel however that it ended a bit abruptly for such a previously detailed piece. But overall it was a very nice and sweet story. |
| Alex:
alexbirch (at) blueyonder (dot) co (dot) uk This was a well written story which seemed to promise a lot and suddenly went a bit flat. The author conveyed the child's fascination with the garbage men and also pretty well described her father's somewhat over the top reaction to her being out of bed. We realise that daddy has no communication skills and that spanking is his remedy for every little fault - because that's how he was brought up. The story would have been great had we had some inkling of Rosemary's reaction to his parenting approach but what could have been a really good family relationship tale just missed out a tad I feel. |
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CK: CrimsnKid6 (at) aol (dot) com Maybe I'm inferring too much here, but as a reader it saddens me that Rosemary didn't share her fantasy about the garbage men with her father, who obviously did love her. (IME one of the fun things about having young children is listening to their imaginative views of various aspects of life.) Was she afraid that her father would consider it an excuse for misbehavior and punish her more or that he merely would dismiss it as irrelevant while his mindset was in a disciplinary mode? Hopefully she shared her view of "the king and his men" with her father later… |
| Hal:
janhaltn (at) gmail (dot) com This was a cute story, It held my interest from the first word to the last word. I enjoy a writer who has some immagination. The flow of this story was very good. I hope that this writer will continue to entertain us for a long time. Even with todays computer spell checkers and grammar checking it is always nice to see the work of a good writer. This is a good example of that skill. The word picture were also enjoyable. In summary, this was just a fun story to read. |
| Kris:
worsci (at) webtv (dot) net This was a nice, compact view into the mind of an imaginative little girl. The ending might have had more of a kick with less focus on her father's thoughts and more inside the mind of the girl imagining the spanking as a trial to be endured in her imaginary kingdom. |