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Summer's End
the Crimson Kid
CrimsnKid6 (at) aol (dot) com

Category: Coming of Age

(All rights reserved. This story's setting is late August of 1975 at a summer camp in the U.S.A.)
 



It was actually Fate that I felt frustrated toward as I walked to my cousin's cabin carrying Brittany's wide leather belt, but Fate couldn't be corporally chastised so I required an alternate target.

Paul seemed unsurprised when he opened the door in response my knocking.

"Hi, Miriam," he said diffidently as I entered, "How's Brittany?"

"Brokenhearted and blubbering," I replied bluntly, slapping the doubled-over leather against my palm, "But she won't be the only one crying her eyes out tonight."

He shrugged. "I figured that."

My resolve stiffened. "You won't be so nonchalant once I'm burning up your bare behind, count on that. Set the chair backs together and bring me your birthday paddle, dear cousin."

His gaze was downcast. "Yes, ma'am."

Two minutes later he was on all fours and bent over the adjacent backs of the two armless chairs in the cozy cabin while a sturdy Spencer paddle lay on his nightstand.

"I'll pull them down," I announced, swiftly lowering his sweatpants to knee level, effectively baring his firmly-rounded buttocks since he was wearing only a jockstrap underneath. "Were you expecting this, Paul?" I demanded.

He gulped. "Pretty much, I knew you'd be angry."

"Not to mentioned deeply disappointed in you." Standing to his left, I lashed the supple belt fiercely against each backthrust buttcheek–THWACK!! CRACK!! "How could you break up with Brittany like that?"

Amazingly, there were already teardrops trickling down his face. "We weren't ever going together, so we didn't break up."

Technically he was correct, I realized–although Paul was clearly attracted to Brittany, he had held their interaction back enough to preclude a full romantic relationship.

"You've hurt her feelings badly," I accused.

He sobbed. "I know…Better now than later."

"There's no need for later!" I delivered six blistering-hard strokes of the leather, leaving stripes across his quivering undercheeks.

His tears flowed freely. "Thee-These luh-long distance r-romances never wir-work out, I've seh-seen them f-fall apart."

Twelve more sizzling licks had him wailing pitifully. "There are exceptions, you don't know unless you try! You were meant to be together…"

Paul's head shook. "Nah-Not now…Just please punish me…"

So I did, administering a lengthy leathering followed by an extended emphatic application of the paddle's stinging hardwood atop the strapmarks crisscrossing his exposed posterior, leaving him bawling like a baby.

Despite the intensity of the spanking, I knew that the physical hurting I'd induced had merely triggered his abject weeping.

Afterward, my teary-eyed, scarlet-bottomed cousin embraced me tightly while expressing hope that he and Brittany could remain friends and might someday become lovers.

I was unconvinced. "She'll never be your girlfriend or close friend after this," I opined sadly, "You'll never meet someone who'll love you as much as Brittany could."

(It was omnisciently melodramatic, an 18-year-old passing judgement on her 19-year-old cousin's lifelong romantic prospects, but that's the arrogance of youth.)

Then, because I cared for him dearly, I started crying too…


Readers Comments:
Mary: gemcollector2001(at) yahoo (dot)com

A bittersweet ending to a story full of as much action and suspense that could be packed into a five hundred word limit.  I liked the way the writer doesn't reveal the ages of the participants until the very end of the story, it lets the reads use their own imagination as to whether or not they might be a married couple who just separated or a boyfriend girlfriend who just broke up. I also liked how the author mentions the fact that the "Miriam" admits her own melodramatic arrogance that comes with those of her age group I think that little point in the story brought it to a more realistic aspect.
Alex: alexbirch (at) blueyonder (dot) co (dot) uk

I confess to having a problem with F/M stories, partly because they are 'not my bag' and secondly because, to put a grown man in the position of submissive requires a state of mind I can't relate to - but, that said, this was a well enough written story but, somehow, the circumstances of the plot were not only familiar but seemed very contrived.  It might have worked better had the 'avenging angel' been Brittany's mother, but a girl younger than her male 'victim' removed even that degree of viability.  I realise I may be being unfair in that spanking, for me, has to titillate. And, for that to happen, circumstances have to be vaguely credible and, I'm sorry, but this just wasn't.
Kris Worsci:  worsci (at) webtv (dot) net

This had some interesting detail, some "blistering-hard strokes of leather," mention of "quivering undercheeks."  It seems like Paul was looking to excorcise some lingering feelings for Brittany by submitting to the spanking, but he didn't quite make it, as he retained ideas of being her friend, and possibly future lover.  I'm wondering if it would make a stronger story if Miriam could deliver that for him, perhaps with a second dose after his final comment.  Still, her melodramatic "you'll never find someone who loves you like that" comment fits in with teen angst and insecurity.
Hal:  janhaltn (at) gmail (dot) com

I felt lost in this story.  I never did figure out exactly what happened.  I ended, looking for chapter one.  I had more questions then answers after reading this story.  Was Brittany crying from a belt spanking or was she crying because Paul had just dumped her. Was she in another cabin near by or miles and miles away?  Maybe I wanted too much from this story and should just accept what is there.  The word pictures were clear.  The story had a nice flow to it.  I hope this writer will give us many more stories to read.
Jess:  peaceluvnbooks (at) clovermail (dot) net

I liked the opening line to this story-the way fate is personified as someone unspankable.  I thought that was a unique idea and great intro.

I wasn't really able to get into the heads of these characters.  I would liked to know more about their thoughts and emotions or be given more background.  Is it standard for Miriam to spank her older cousin?  How did this unusual family relationship come about?  Who is Brittany to Miriam and why is Brittany so important?  I know I'm asking a lot out of a short story, but I think some of that detail would have enhanced the overall piece.

I liked the way in which the author wove together the action of the spanking and the dialogue between the two characters.  Writing good dialogue can be difficult and I think this one was done well.  I especially liked the lines that read "'There's no need for later!' I delivered six blistering-hard strokes of the leather, leaving stripes across his quivering undercheeks."  I thought this exchange made the scene very vivid and underscored Miriam's anger and frustration.  Besides, I like spankings when they are punctuated by conversations like this.

Also, the interesting fact that the belt Miriam used on her cousin belonged to Brittany was not lost on me.  I enjoyed that little detail.